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    dots Submission Name: Yoursdots
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    Author: Mandi Gayle
    ASL Info:    22/Female/Kentucky
    Elite Ratio:    4.45 - 298/348/150
    Words: 112
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsYoursdots
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    Darkened eyes upon my face,
    Breaths falling upon my lips;
    Body supple, lush and willing
    ‘Neath your roaming fingertips.

    My thighs clench and tremble,
    Back arcs in wanton delight;
    And nails impress heated flesh
    As moans caress the night.

    I want to know you as no other,
    Crawl deep inside your skin;
    Rest my head upon your heart
    And proclaim it whole again.

    I want to hear with every beat
    The sounding of my name;
    A rhythm sweet and steady,
    Unbridled, and never tame.

    Softened eyes upon my face,
    Sweat falling from my skin;
    My tattered spirit in your hands,
    Yours to break, or yours to mend.




    Submitted on 2009-01-16 09:55:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I thought that considering the subject matter, this was very well written and the word choice was beautiful. As with many good poems, it provokes imagery in the reader's minds, stirs emotions and brings out carnal senses. I have no complaints or critiques.
    | Posted on 2009-02-01 00:00:00 | by jaramae | [ Reply to This ]
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    I liked the the poem really,its well written,just the subject matter comes across to me (personally) as un-striking,I do think its very beautifully written though,so I applaud.

    -Craig
    | Posted on 2009-01-17 00:00:00 | by Raphael | [ Reply to This ]


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