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    dots Submission Name: Find Medots
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    Author: akaietowa-ru_18
    ASL Info:    20/F/Belly of the Beast
    Elite Ratio:    3.68 - 101/125/64
    Words: 120
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
    Total Views: 910
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 915



    Description:
       Oh, just something I wrote since I'm so hell bent on werewolves and vampires and dragons.


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    dotsFind Medots
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    My head full of dreams,
    Wild visions
    Eyes filled with glittering stars,
    Luminescent gems.

    Whispers from darkness beckon,
    Calling, commanding, plaintive.
    Beautiful mysteries, exotic enchantings.

    “Find me,” the lure of a siren at midnight
    Casting dark spells over the heart.
    Passionate blooming awaiting
    Like that of first romance.

    “Find me,” the soul harks within
    Life as simplistic as breathing,
    A handicap to the senses
    Blinding or binding.

    Make the choice;
    Directions askew with hurried steps
    A miss and a pass, too fast.

    “Find me,” opposite echoes in the distance.
    Will they merge?
    To make a single voice.
    Perhaps a day
    Or eternity.

    Time leads surprises over horizons
    Hope bleeds into the body.




    Submitted on 2009-01-17 01:21:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Fantastic and spooky, a strange but sublime combination. This is very surreal and eerie, conjuring up visions of a misty glade by thin moonlight and other strange, vivid scenes. It has the feeling of a waking dream, if you get my meaning, with the voices calling and your rather nimble-tongued wording. Your creativity shows quite clearly in this piece, keep it up!

    Slainte chugat,

    DW
    | Posted on 2009-01-17 00:00:00 | by Shadowstar13 | [ Reply to This ]


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