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Alex


Author: LucyDiamond
ASL Info:    17/F/Sky
Elite Ratio:    3.9 - 365 /575 /251
Words: 179
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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Alex



I like to read your poems
because they remind me
of my own
and I take comfort
that I’m not alone.

I think you’re weird
and I like it
when you try to grow your beard
out and then shave it
again, and again.

I like it when
you lock the door—
it lets me know
there will be lots,
lots more.

I like to hold your hand on walks at night
where we improvise
and watch owners
fuck their cars and we smoke
cheap cigars.

I like it when you kiss
my neck and my lips,
my shoulder, and I like it
when our shirts come off
and you look so happy in the darkness.

Blindness—?

I am not alone,
I am not alone,
I am not alone.

And I won’t be alone,
I pray—
promise you’ll be there
to kiss me on Sunday.






Submitted on 2009-01-17 02:50:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Oooh. So hot. Hahaha. I really liked reading this. Hmmm...I miss a certain person right now.

I love the natural way some of the lines rhymed. Ahh...you naughty girl.
| Posted on 2009-04-24 00:00:00 | by Suven7 | [ Reply to This ]
  I liked it. It's cute in a good way because it's straightforward and there's a nice sincerity to that which rings true.
| Posted on 2009-01-22 00:00:00 | by Daniel Barlow | [ Reply to This ]
  Its very beautifull...

Honestly

-Craig
| Posted on 2009-01-17 00:00:00 | by Raphael | [ Reply to This ]


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