Description: Yeah I just felt like writing something...
Join the club, Everyone has a broken heart -------------------------------------------
Join the Club,
Membership is free, pain doesn't pay
It's time to start a new day
Come, come inside, no need to hide
Because everyones got a broken heart
We know what it feels like to be ripped apart
We've cried your tears
Sighed that sigh
Felt your fears
We've woken up just to cry
Tried our best to stifle that sigh
Thought those words that wouldn't die
Missed the first hello and the last goodbye
So sign your name
And play the game
Its all about the pain
And we're going insane
I like the theme and how you set it up. I would have said everyone has instead of everyones got, but it's probably a dialect thing. The end is to open ended for me, I want something more final. Overall this is a great piece that everyone can relate to.
Hm. I like this. It's simple and too the point. It's not superflous or however you spell that. You took a theme everyone could relate to and put it into terms that the common reader can understand. Like me. And, that's is refreshing.
I think the last line is like cool. But, it needs a little more finality--at least in my opinion. :) Something that just says WALAH! You know? I don't. Anyway. It's good. :)