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    dots Submission Name: Torn and Tattered Wingsdots
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    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 453
    Class/Type: Poetry/Betrayal
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    Torn and Tattered Wings

    Itís not easy to have seen
    All the darkness inside you
    Places I have been
    Sorrow and degrading
    Thrusting their blades epithetize
    Hard into your heart

    I look in your eyes
    See the padded cells of your tears
    Their blackwash lays cringing
    Dogging your footsteps
    With their fears

    Nights unending betrayal
    Of innocence used
    The child in you defiled
    Your love just savaged into rags

    No itís not easy to see
    Through the tattered grey flags
    Tormented a vicious storm
    Fingers of icicle claw born
    Would want to rip out the heart of you

    Hidden beneath saddening locks
    Shuttered rooms dug to pits so forlorn
    Buried your sweet beauty
    In a shell of nothing to be loved

    No one can see
    Where the un-healing tracks lead
    Where your whipped lashed back still bleeds
    From those who simply couldnít care less

    An Innocent lost
    Violated by the perverse
    Life line cut
    Broken by silence
    Shoved into the corners
    Where playful eyes
    Just wanted to end in forgetful dreams

    No itís not easy to have seen
    All the pillory deepen inside you
    Places I have been
    With all the Pain and the indifference
    Battering back the resplendence
    Born into your heart

    And for the rebuke of a guilty world
    You took on all the blaming
    For having been raped by life
    And all the mistrust
    All of the desperate need
    Left you standing alone
    Just needing to be loved

    The beacon of your light
    Standing alone on a hill top of strength
    In a steadfast bravery
    You shine it out
    For all the world to see

    The courage to rise up and fight
    Fight against the ignorance
    Is how your plight reaches out
    In such a gentle face of tenderness
    With compassions arms

    Your glory is a star
    Brighter than many by far
    Fought from the disenchanted heart
    With all the sacrifice in your soul

    And if I knew how
    How to tell you
    Of the respect you endear
    Engendered by your miracle
    Your will not to fall
    Fall into the abysm of hates purposeless

    I have known
    And I have been shown
    The fierce and burgeoning light
    Living behind Angel wings
    Lifting up your presence
    Exulting your loves triumph over the sufferings

    Instead you soar
    Even though your fracture remains
    Though encumbered by chains
    Still you rise up and fly
    As high as you can

    On those torn and tattered wings



    ( Inspired by ďChasing CarsĒ by Snow Patrol
    and written for a dear and beautiful friend )




    Submitted on 2009-01-17 17:31:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      "No itís not easy to see
    Through the tattered grey flags
    Tormented a vicious storm
    Fingers of icicle claw born
    Would want to rip out the heart of you"

    "I have known
    And I have been shown
    The fierce and burgeoning light
    Living behind Angel wings
    Lifting up your presence
    Exulting your loves triumph over the sufferings

    Instead you soar
    Even though your fracture remains
    Though encumbered by chains
    Still you rise up and fly
    As high as you can"

    I could not help myself. Those three stanzas convey immense love and emotion. I could tell you cared deeply for the subject of this poem. Vivid and full of fantastic imagery, it is one of the greatest poems on this site that I have ever read, and I do mean that. You continue to amaze me with your writes. Punctuation and grammar, impeccable as per usual, which makes me even happier with the poem. Fantastic. Fan-tast-ic. Keep it up!

    Slainte chugat,

    DW
    | Posted on 2009-01-19 00:00:00 | by Shadowstar13 | [ Reply to This ]


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