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    dots Submission Name: Wormwood c. by ruejacobs 1/18/09 2A.M.dots
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    Author: ruejacobs
    ASL Info:    39/feminazi/Gehenna
    Elite Ratio:    4.82 - 619/473/167
    Words: 175
    Class/Type: Poetry/
    Total Views: 900
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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       i have birthed demons and angels.
    but the scales have tipped too soon.


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    dotsWormwood c. by ruejacobs 1/18/09 2A.M.dots
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    how can i validate that nest
    it's only a rude pile of twigs and tinder now.
    two-for-one sales abound...
    the shells at my feet...

    of the three one was mortal
    so i dipped the child by his heel
    in the Styx

    now why shall i be surprised
    that those fingers stretched forth
    from the void to claim his soul
    as it laid in my palm?
    i was interupted in my work.

    hell was his cradle
    and horror his plaything
    i could never balance for long,
    why should he?

    he was a meteor
    ion-charged and
    dragging entire worlds in his wake
    he swept the sky:
    the star that fell from heaven into the sea

    he was a debris plume on the horizon
    a pillar of smoke and ash
    which mushroomed impossibly high
    and rolled toward us
    engulfing us all

    it is dark now
    i can hear you choking, Little Ones.
    take my hand
    here's a mercy:
    i am the Mother of Wormwood
    and i'm on good terms with Death.




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    Artemisia absinthium

    my goodness ..... this is an explosive outpouring of emotion. i can see why you have been called the goddess of darkness. the words are powerful on their own, but the fact that you have illustrated them with the image 'asteroid-hits-earth' suggests that there is a great deal more suppressed energy still firing away, molten magma like, under the surface, ready to be blown asunder at any moment . and gurgling within that boiling rock, yet to erupt, are ( or at least there appears to be ) many unresolved issues.

    so mother of wormwood ..... sprung up in the track of that serpent as it left the garden of paradise, i can see why it is often used in making vengeance. you battle for your children, perhaps like Bellona the Ancient Roman war goddess that drank wormwood and was crowned with snakes. they say its flowers can help those on journeys esp when they involve magical paths ! but yes, you are of course correct, pure wormwood oil is lethal. i guess the skill is knowing just how much you can take. to cure you or kill you ........ i read your previous piece Guilt (for Gnu) your son Gary, and i for one would never believe or even consider that you were anything other than a very caring mother. most important of all (in my opinion) is that you never deny your children and you are continually showing the world that you are proud of them.

    jacqueline
    | Posted on 2009-02-17 00:00:00 | by Alter idem | [ Reply to This ]
      OMG, you are a goddess of darkness, this is a vivid portrait of emotion in words... it creates it's own reds and smoke-greys in the way you paint with the words. Excellent, I very much enjoyed reading!
    | Posted on 2009-02-01 00:00:00 | by SmokinG | [ Reply to This ]
      Your style of writing is very engaging and readible. I'm not familiar with the topic but I just wanted to let you know I enjoyed the delivery :)
    | Posted on 2009-01-21 00:00:00 | by Daniel Barlow | [ Reply to This ]
      He is a deity too mother.
    Have Faith,
    Only a God could get this far with HIS mischivous streak.

    ~Carrie
    | Posted on 2009-01-20 00:00:00 | by dismal_s child | [ Reply to This ]
      wow............this ones pretty hard hitting to say the least. this could be taken several ways.........not even going to go into that cuz i have no clue. perfect wording and infinitely intriguing................hmm.....maybe a fav. not sure. sorry i don't have many more words or nothing constructive. very sharp colors.
    | Posted on 2009-01-19 00:00:00 | by cornonthekob | [ Reply to This ]


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