concidering this is a lullaby.to be sung to a child......i think there is no problem to it kind of copying the hush lil baby.thing. i agree with it being beautiful for what it is. nothing struck me as incredibly original, but being a lullaby again, maybe that shouldn't be the point. children are awesome, good to see some love.
I'm really tempted to give you a great review mainly because I loved that lullaby when I was small and even up to this day, anything that reminds me of those memories, I still love. So I will say that you singing that lullaby to your baby girl is such a blessing.
From a lyrical point of view, and this is the part I really wanted to leave out but seeing that you want an unbiased review, I guess I shouldn't fear hearing back from you. So here goes.
Though I love the lyrics, I think that if you want to write your own version to this lyrics, maybe it should have a different twist or a different sense of originality. I don't feel like it's coming from you, I feel like you're copying or trying to be similar to the lyrics.
I thought that was the main downfall. What I did like was the fact that you had a structure. It felt like you thought this through and how you were going to write it and I always appreciate pieces that have some kind of structure.
It's not mindblowing but it's sweet and you had inspiration to write it. So I loved it for what it is.