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    dots Submission Name: Spookeddots
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    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 238
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsSpookeddots
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    Spooked

    Unknown alleyways
    Where slanting darkness
    Camouflages corners and discovers threat
    Lost in a maze
    Of dead end shadows from fickle moon
    Dissembles direction
    Turning left
    Straight ahead
    Turning right

    The tourist map of instinct
    Points north
    But thinks the exit
    Lays south
    To edged near a wall
    Hangs a screeching gate
    Pensive listening for its winded clue
    Leaves dumb devices of panic
    Marching on raised pulses

    Time walks around
    The implacable bricks
    Menacing the insecurity of its passing
    By footsteps echoing
    As they repeat their searching
    Way
    Out
    Way
    Out
    Find
    The
    Way
    OUT

    Eyes survey for some recognizable shade
    Desperate to reconstruct
    Confidence
    As it trickles away on every stride
    The eerie dog fox call barks
    On hairy standing chills
    Down a shivered neck
    Shuddered spine
    Stay calm
    Way
    Out
    Way
    Out
    Way
    Out
    Find
    The
    Way
    OUT

    With outstretched hands
    Stumbling blind on creeping fingers
    They begin to stir
    Clammy cold sweat
    The soup of fear
    In its wet snarling teeth and demon eyes
    With bristled fur comes sneaking
    Hunger
    Primordial animal
    Wants to get out of here

    Touches cold metal
    Creeks the gate
    Iron bars hang awkward

    But wait

    Take your time

    Breath the spooky

    Calmly push past the rustling walling thing

    When the moon breaks

    Out

    Outside

    Way

    Out.








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