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The Raven

Author: Fraser
ASL Info:    26
Elite Ratio:    2.43 - 30 /55 /35
Words: 104
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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The Raven

A raven is perched tall atop an evergreen tree
Seeing all that those black beady eyes can see
He sees a rabbit and a tiny mouse
He sees the antlers of a very large moose
Spreading its wings, balancing in the breeze
This darkened shadow begins to breath
He lets out a loud shrieking cry
Disturbing the hallows of the trees inside
The ravens call is heard from miles around
From the cold crisp air to the insects in the ground
I peer at this creature as it rests its beak quite high
I stand quite still and look it directly in the eye

Submitted on 2009-01-20 22:09:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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