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    dots Submission Name: Trust In My Faithdots
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    Author: Crimsonpathways
    Elite Ratio:    5.96 - 202/226/57
    Words: 283
    Class/Type: Poetry/Religious
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    Description:
       Well, I can't recall exactly why I wrote it. I am sure I was upset, that's where all the poetry comes from.

    This is more recent. My other pieces are sort of depressing, this is much more hopeful. I think it flows pretty well. I do not speak in metaphors and sillyness anymore. I just write things in plain English.

    I really do not have much to say about this one, except... this is my first poem back on Elite. ILY guys. This isn't really anything epic, just my own silly realization that I have been trying to take care of too much myself and it was eating me. I need to trust in my faith, and give my life over to God.


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    dotsTrust In My Faithdots
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    Lord, you blessed me with the
    Ability to help others,
    However, you forgot to grant
    Me the strength to deal
    With my own problems.

    Lord, I am being picked apart
    From the inside out,
    And all I want to do
    Is see her happiness
    Color her face once more.

    Lord, I am crying over here,
    Wondering why it is this way.
    If you cannot give me the
    Strength to save myself,
    Then where is my savior?

    Lord, I am tearing myself apart,
    This is perhaps no one’s fault
    Aside from my own,
    But what is there for me to do
    With no one here but me?

    Lord, I am begging you,
    I am down on my knees,
    My sunken eyes and bowed head
    Are my only defense against
    So many obstacles.

    Lord, will there be peace,
    Or am I meant to be this way,
    The middleman,
    Torn into a thousand pieces,
    Stranded before you.

    Lord, forgive me
    For being afraid to let my life
    Into your hands.
    But how could I have ever
    Learned to trust?

    Lord, believe in me,
    For no one else will
    And my options are worn.
    How could I have ever known
    What to say?

    Lord, give me the strength
    To fight my own battles,
    Since I have not the strength
    To trust another to fight
    In my stead.

    Lord, am I a coward?
    But I have the strength to
    Stand before you,
    Terrified and alone.
    Perhaps I am the hero.

    Lord, I love you
    For the lesson you forced
    Me to learn all on my own.
    For it is not learning, when
    Everything is handed to me.




    Submitted on 2009-01-21 02:16:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Whats wrong with metaphors?

    -Craig
    | Posted on 2009-01-21 00:00:00 | by Raphael | [ Reply to This ]
      This is the most powerful and soul felt poem that I have ever read. Be cheerful,daughter, Crimsonpathways, I too have walked my Crimsonpathways to bring my joy to you. Be faithful in your joy of bringing cheer to others. I know you have read about me in the Book I wrote by the help of my sisters and brothers. It is by humility that I chose to lay in a manger for others to love me though I to them was a stranger.
    | Posted on 2009-01-21 00:00:00 | by realpoet | [ Reply to This ]


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