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    dots Submission Name: Black Dogdots
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    Author: rws
    ASL Info:    57/m/ohio
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 2777/1297/258
    Words: 64
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Misc
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       ~writer's block as religious experience~


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    Black Dog

    How do you dream
    I never dream

    Heaven has a fatwa
    On my soul

    Heavy as an angel
    Pinned with prayers

    Earth in a whirling
    dervish dance

    Enticed my dry mind
    With a covenant

    Till all the naked stars
    Lay at my feet

    Empty as the sky
    I never dream




    Submitted on 2009-01-21 13:51:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      The title reminds me of Churchill 'once I had a black dog', and this book about depression (it's all pictures, hardly any words, of a black dog and this man who's depressed).

    I keep coming back to this and I'm not sure why.
    The refrain 'I never dream' speaks to me, somehow. It's powerful and poignant.

    Because of the title I read this as being about depression, and I think you nailed that heaviness and hopelessness. The sky losing its stars, the stars being empty- you've taken all these things that are usually used as motifs in love poems or joyful poems about nature and you've made them dark and upsetting. This is an evocative poem- the writing is full of restraint, but it conveys so much. A truly wonderful write.

    Aly
    | Posted on 2009-10-11 00:00:00 | by AlyRose | [ Reply to This ]
      Very interesting... I don't know if it was meant to mean anything particular, other than just that pulling-empty feeling of laying awake and staring into the night sky through the window when you can't sleep, and all those swirling tired half-thoughts that come...

    It has a sensuality to it though, like an eloquent bleak film noir on paper.
    | Posted on 2009-08-09 00:00:00 | by grey_girl | [ Reply to This ]
      Ok so I read your piece as a gesture of interest since you responded to my low form enticement piece.
    I do not share your attitude demonstrated towards Life and that what is considered as Holy by me. Whatever you are trying to accomplish does not agree with my appetite for Life.
    Joachim.
    | Posted on 2009-01-29 00:00:00 | by Joachim | [ Reply to This ]
      it's funny, black dog reminds me of two things... led zep and john irving. the song black dog and sorrow the black lab in hotel newhampshire. not that that means anything to you, but these are my initial thoughts.

    'Heaven has a fatwa
    On my soul'

    what a great freaking line.

    i also love this -

    Till all the naked stars
    Lay at my feet

    Empty as the sky

    sheesh. kind of heavy, that.

    i don't know, i suppose i always just dig what you have to say. not much of a meaningful comment, just wanted you to know you are read. (smile).

    | Posted on 2009-01-21 00:00:00 | by isabella | [ Reply to This ]


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