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    dots Submission Name: Boulevard of Broken Dreams.dots
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    Author: Joachim
    ASL Info:    75 Male RSA
    Elite Ratio:    5.39 - 361/264/178
    Words: 223
    Class/Type: Poetry/Satire
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       The 13th Tribe is a mysterious addition to the 12 Tribes of Israel - of Lost Souls.


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    dotsBoulevard of Broken Dreams.dots
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    Boulevard of Broken Dreams.

    Walking the Lanes of Memories
    Faintly tainted with Nostalgia
    Brittle as Winter’s Mourning Bane.

    Old discarded bulletins litter Financial Halls Broad Walks
    Sharing Faded yellowing Pages of God’s Word
    A Silenced Voice Long Gone.

    A “Mindless Wind” shrouded in Mysteries
    Tiredly finding its way down Corridors
    spilling down empty passageways
    shattered tainted widows.
    Lingering on Lifeless Terraces
    Miserable Wailing Betwixt it All.

    Haunting fingers rustling through faded I.O.U useless Promises
    Dimly reflecting its once merry tidings
    Bygone birthdays, forlorn get well soon, forgotten remember me?
    Now empty places and empty spaces.
    “Wisps of the Winds”
    Cascading visions filled with Fading Countenances
    A Kaleidoscope of Broken Dreams.

    “A Stale Wind” touching “Memory Lane”
    Silent Shadows once Aflame with Wonder
    A Candle Flame Flickers!
    “Winds of Prosperity” now “Broken Squall’s of Promises”
    “Fathers of Fore bearers”
    A “Bastard`s Inn”
    A Shameless Progeny.

    Ancient Eden along Tainted Path Ways
    Scouring the Precipices of the Abyss!
    Searching the Lost Souls
    Soiled Blood-soaked Holy Banners of Honour.
    “A Wind Recalls” Yesteryears Hopes
    Bonded with Today’s Sorrows
    Lamenting the Tomorrows

    This God’s “Wind” His People This 13th Tribe
    Jehovah’s Curse!

    This Boulevard of Broken Dreams!

    Joachim.




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      Hi I reread your comms on Doulevard of broken dreams 29.01.2009
    And even now must say that it was a marvelous piece of poetry.
    I dont know if I commented on it but the 13thTribe in my religion is the Jews from Esau that is The Edomites.

    Apart from that the poem is brilliant and most inspireing.

    R,egards joachim
    | Posted on 2012-06-08 00:00:00 | by Joachim | [ Reply to This ]
      You've put a lot of ump into this piece. Beautifully done! Allow me to write the following .
    Ah, such a beautiful person
    wanting to beautiful something not beautiful .
    He came from far away
    to teach the unbeautiful
    how to be beautiful .
    He gave them a hoe
    to grow some beautiful seed .
    The 13th tribe thought they more beautiful
    than the Beautiful Servant come.
    The 13th tribe in a slautering spoof
    got rid of this more beautiful than they
    (or so they thought)
    Now this more Beautiful One
    became more beautiful than before
    giving more beauty to the 13th tribe
    (to all who would) if they but sit
    in His salon to dry their tangled hair.
    | Posted on 2009-01-29 00:00:00 | by realpoet | [ Reply to This ]


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