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    dots Submission Name: Memorydots

    Author: longlosthoper
    Elite Ratio:    2.42 - 6/6/5
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       For english coursework we have to write a short story, this is the suicide note my character leaves.
    Comments please

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    There's a dream I can't remember
    But it's torturing my soul
    I'm searching for the memory
    Hoping it will make me whole
    Did I forget because it hurt too much
    For me who was never strong
    Do I block it for my sanity
    Or because I know that I did wrong
    They will never understand the fear
    I felt when I saw you shaking
    And crying that you needed me
    For the decision you were making
    I now remember your face that day
    Afraid but embracing your power
    I helped you take your final bow
    I counted down that one last hour
    They cried out that it was an awful shame
    For you to take your life so young
    They'd never guess that it was me
    That pulled the trigger of the gun
    So now your soul is free and flying
    While mine is trapped and alone
    You asked me before to take your life
    And now it's time to take my own

    Submitted on 2009-01-21 21:02:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    That was beautiful! It broke my heart. Keep it up =]

    | Posted on 2009-01-28 00:00:00 | by PhantomRose | [ Reply to This ]
      This was beautifully sad. I loved it. I haven't read anything like this in a long while. It's refreashing. I love your style.
    Keep up the great work and I'll keep reading

    | Posted on 2009-01-21 00:00:00 | by MinervaBlu | [ Reply to This ]

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