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    dots Submission Name: Things I Never Knewdots

    Author: heartless_
    Elite Ratio:    2.46 - 284/251/154
    Words: 215
    Class/Type: Poetry/BrokenHeart
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    dotsThings I Never Knewdots

    When you walked out,
    Left me without a thought.
    I was sure you broke me,
    Thought I knew total misery.
    But I didn't know how far i had to fall.
    Didn't know the pain that was to come.

    Every day i began to feel,
    More and more pain, as the pieces fell apart.
    I tried anything I could to move on.
    No matter what I did, the harder it became.
    For every tear that ran down,
    Emptiness stayed as black streaks disapeared.

    I thought you shattered me,
    Completly broke my heart.
    Though now I know how wrong I was.
    How far I had to fall, or the pain that came.
    When you said you never wanted to see me.

    You pushed me away didn't let me in.
    Then you started to be cruel.
    Saying things you knew would make me cry.
    The more sad I was the happier you became.
    It seems I never knew the man you were.
    Never did i realize how much you didn't care.

    Now as I see you turn to her,
    Tell her you love her, make promises to her.
    As you push me out the door.
    I realize I'm learning the things I never knew.
    Feeling pain I have never felt before.

    Submitted on 2009-01-21 22:04:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      When the heart is broken, the world breaks apart into many pieces...

    Pieces that remind you of lost and pain, memories become hollow graves of the soul...

    Doesnt it feel like the memories become shards of glass around you? stainned by your grief?

    For you are never alone in your grief, take heart in knowing there are those who share your pain...

    It is no sin to love and lost, but it is a sin to punish yourself for the love and lost...
    | Posted on 2009-02-07 00:00:00 | by FallenAngelJC | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey chick,

    I know that things can be real rough. Especially with him (a boy). And he deserves everything that he gets. I like your poetry very much. I think that youre doing quite well chicka. Keep your head held high, things will work out. I love yas hon. Misses yas.

    | Posted on 2009-01-22 00:00:00 | by unnamedtear | [ Reply to This ]

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