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Just something rough I wrote
Can be taken in several ways, a lost friendship, love, anything.
Basically for anyone whos ever been lied to by someone you trusted.
I'm nostalgic not because I miss you
But rather, just because
I lay to rest in loving memory
Of a bond that never was
I realize now it was just a meaningless sentence
Written in red on my hand
Just a mess of tangled thoughts
Only we could understand
Remove my shades that blinded me
Shed my masked hat and reveal my messy hair
Delusions made me feel what I thought was mutual
No surprise that nothing was ever there
Analyzed your photographs and crumbled notes
For the hundredth time today
Read the words I'll never hear you say again
Signed with a heart beside the name
To care was just another word
It makes me sick to see
To say it made my lips numb
To act it just took so much out of me
Submitted on 2009-01-22 01:44:00
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This. Is awesome. I love the flow, it was so smooth that I just read line after line after line. Wonderful job :)
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