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    dots Submission Name: Meh.dots
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    Author: xieno
    Elite Ratio:    2.41 - 7/16/24
    Words: 142
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 554
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    Description:
       Just something rough I wrote
    Can be taken in several ways, a lost friendship, love, anything.
    Basically for anyone whos ever been lied to by someone you trusted.


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    dotsMeh.dots
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    I'm nostalgic not because I miss you
    But rather, just because
    I lay to rest in loving memory
    Of a bond that never was

    I realize now it was just a meaningless sentence
    Written in red on my hand
    Just a mess of tangled thoughts
    Only we could understand

    Remove my shades that blinded me
    Shed my masked hat and reveal my messy hair
    Delusions made me feel what I thought was mutual
    No surprise that nothing was ever there

    Analyzed your photographs and crumbled notes
    For the hundredth time today
    Read the words I'll never hear you say again
    Signed with a heart beside the name

    To care was just another word
    It makes me sick to see
    To say it made my lips numb
    To act it just took so much out of me




    Submitted on 2009-01-22 01:44:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This. Is awesome. I love the flow, it was so smooth that I just read line after line after line. Wonderful job :)
    | Posted on 2009-01-22 00:00:00 | by DontxSurrender | [ Reply to This ]


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