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    dots Submission Name: Something's Gotta Givedots

    Author: Jessa
    ASL Info:    29/f/pa
    Elite Ratio:    3.73 - 221/209/73
    Words: 98
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       Is there anything REAL left in this world?

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    dotsSomething's Gotta Givedots

    My knuckles bleed, as the walls beg for more
    The pain is just as bad as it was before
    Painted from the ground, all the way to the ceiling
    Emotions flow red, and run out of feeling

    Medicated to live
    For death is at stake
    Something's gotta give
    Something's gotta break

    Cement & cinder blocks, asphalt & stone
    Not an inch of peace to wonder alone
    Kicking & spitting, punching & shoving
    Only the junkies know of good loving

    Choking to live
    For life tastes fake
    Something's gotta give
    Something's gotta break

    Submitted on 2009-01-22 02:46:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      You make me feel the pain. Whatever it is, real and fake, I know something's gotta give, something's gotta break. You have imagery that nails me to the wall. you've got real good stuff, Jessa.
    | Posted on 2009-01-23 00:00:00 | by my shadow | [ Reply to This ]
      This is well written and well structured, and describes desperation perfectly! It describes a difficult mood or situation to write about, and you have done it very well!

    Nice work Jessa!
    | Posted on 2009-01-22 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      Very Emotionaly Driven.

    Its very reminicent of a poem I did a few years back,

    Did you mean to say wonder? I read it and the word Wander came to mind before wonder did, However both fit.

    It's a great peice, Good Job
    | Posted on 2009-01-22 00:00:00 | by dismal_s child | [ Reply to This ]

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