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    dots Submission Name: where does that leave medots
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    Author: scardnscared
    ASL Info:    20
    Elite Ratio:    2.87 - 339/412/258
    Words: 141
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 82
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    Bytes: 825



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    He smiled at me
    when he walked out the door
    walked into her arms
    and drove away.
    What was I to say
    cause i'd said it all before
    knew she was just waiting now
    for the bottom to fall
    for us to slip up.
    I wonder if she knows it
    but you were my world
    and you still hold it
    the ache doesnt subside
    as the days go by
    but grows.
    I knew that she was looking at my weak spots
    picking apart my words
    and using them to suit her
    I shouldn't laugh, but I do
    cause everything she is
    is something I used to do.
    So what can I say
    except all I feel is this pain
    but I was right all along
    I was the loser, she was the winner
    so where does that leave me now.




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