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    dots Submission Name: A likely ideadots
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    Author: Robert Neville
    ASL Info:    16/m/London
    Elite Ratio:    0.48 - 10/192/232
    Words: 142
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsA likely ideadots
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    The bombs drop down
    And the food in the canteens
    Finally gain some life
    The gas surrounds
    The people clench their
    Fists and die
    Well it was about time
    Big Ben shows the wrong
    Number, get in line
    Marching soldiers
    With earrings in their noses
    Shoot their guns and destroy
    Parliament, well whets the point
    Children cry as the buildings
    Turn to rubble
    They see their school entwined
    And suddenly they didn’t care
    Until their lungs jumped from
    Inside their body
    And they slowly died
    Everybody climbs in a car
    And drives out
    Just looking to survive
    The eye comes tumbling towards
    Earth, was that worth the money?
    The Thames turns inwards
    And waves engulf the rubble
    Nothing remains except
    Wet, wave soaked rubble
    And we must question
    London, would anybody miss it
    If it wasn’t here?




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