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    dots Submission Name: White Wine Emparado Sun Shine dots
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    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 204
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nostalgia
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    dotsWhite Wine Emparado Sun Shine dots
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    White Wine Emparado Sun Shine ( 2007 )

    The frosted glass
    Trickles in the shade
    Little rivulet’s marking times smiling
    Hazy cool sips
    Of the second bottle
    Shared with talk and laughter
    While Costa Del Blanca heat
    Bakes the dust devils
    Dancing at the seas edge

    Shared bread of the day
    Tuna olives and jalapenos
    Spell their twang
    While giggling on some silly joke

    Its smells like goats cheese
    And tasty trinkets of fishy squid
    Cold crisp vino blanco
    Hazy cool sipped
    Of the third bottle
    Cork’s popped

    Tourist frying in sun tan oil
    Unaware of the benefits of shadow

    We kick back
    Souls replenishing in lazy skies
    Friend filled eyes
    Enjoy the silence of company
    Lilting with Spanish guitars
    And the dusky Arab “looky looky” man plies his wares

    The sleepy heady slows
    Bodies stretch comfortable with tans
    And cigarette smoke
    Drifts hours to the soft washing
    Sighing Mediterranean salt

    Away for the duration
    Left back somewhere the cold chill
    And rain of England’s
    Dismal lowered damp grey
    Shrugged from these shoulders
    And forgotten

    We kick back
    Any further back would lead to snoring

    Souls replenishing in lazy blue skies





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