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    dots Submission Name: Land Of Obscuritydots

    Author: SonOfDamascus
    ASL Info:    18/m/Maine
    Elite Ratio:    2.45 - 27/35/37
    Words: 173
    Class/Type: Poetry/Happy
    Total Views: 469
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       I wrote this.
    because my best friend said that she wanted to escape.
    and go where people wouldn't gossip.
    be without all that drama.

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    dotsLand Of Obscuritydots

    Come away with me.
    Into the land of obscurity.
    Here you’ll find nothing.
    And that may be what you want.

    Maybe its what you need.
    An escape from it all.
    From a land of gossip.
    Where those who don’t care.
    Are good at pretending they do.

    We’ll run through the white fields.
    That aren’t made of snow.
    But the absence of ground.
    On it we’ll lay.
    Not knowing if we’re falling.

    We’ll dodge the little somethings.
    That people claim to be.
    We’ll weave through the webs.
    Of other people’s lives.
    Just hold my hand.
    We can leave it all behind.

    Sweet silence will play through our ears.
    Dancing on naught but our imaginations.
    Leaving no sound but the beat of each other’s heart.
    And the puff of each other’s breath.

    We can keep running from the something world.
    And deeper into our nothing realm.
    We know that we’ll die here.
    But that’s fine by me.
    As long as you’re by my side.
    In this land of obscurity.

    Submitted on 2009-01-25 04:15:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      no not at all.
    thank you.
    | Posted on 2009-02-19 00:00:00 | by SonOfDamascus | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this poem. I can really relate to it. I like the way that it makes me feel. I can't really explain what that it, but I like the fact that it is something that speaks to me. Hope that doesn't sound too corny.
    | Posted on 2009-01-25 00:00:00 | by ImperfectGirl1 | [ Reply to This ]

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