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    dots Submission Name: Just look into my eyesdots
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    Author: PiperH
    ASL Info:    17, F, Georgia
    Elite Ratio:    3.89 - 253/299/172
    Words: 69
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 824
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 400



    Description:
       Just an old poem I wrote about my relationships. I always feel the need to say yes when people ask me out. But I'm never ready for a relationship and I always let them down in the end....


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    dotsJust look into my eyesdots
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    In my eyes, you can see the true me
    You can see the loss of hope
    the pain
    the screaming
    oh, if only you would look into my eyes

    When I look into yours, I see love
    I see happiness
    I know what I have, isn't what you deserve
    that's why you must look into my eyes
    and see the lie that is standing before you





    Submitted on 2009-01-25 19:34:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like this piece, kind of reminds me of myself.
    If someone is interested in me I'll go along and see what they are like and then before you know it I'm in a relationship with someone new without giving myself the time to get over my last. And although i know that will all end soon because my heart isn't really in it, I seem to just go to end anyway and wait for them to end it. My eyes too, are full of pain and i understand exactly what you mean by this and I think you did very well capturing this in such a short piece.

    Great piece I'll be sure to look at your others.

    Danny.
    | Posted on 2009-01-25 00:00:00 | by corruptedspirit | [ Reply to This ]
      "I know what I have, isn't what you deserve
    that's why you must look into my eyes
    and see the lie that is standing before you"
    I really like that part.
    I think you've done a great job on this piece.
    It pulled me right in.
    It was short but good anyways.
    Good job :)
    -E.R
    | Posted on 2009-01-25 00:00:00 | by KillSpoon | [ Reply to This ]


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