Sign up to EliteSkills

Already have an account? Login to Roleplay.Cloud
Forgot password? Recover Password


Author: Doublefeather
Elite Ratio:    3.5 - 71 /61 /33
Words: 66
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
Total Views: 853
Average Vote:    No vote yet.
Bytes: 410



She is the sunset,
The place of final rest,
But the start of a new beginning,
In which the heavenly colors sing,
The reds yell of the joined hearts,
While the yellows speak of the worlds apart,
Then the orange smiles at the merriment,
But the majestic purple shows the commitment,
Now I know that I am blessed,
For I get to see the sunset.

Submitted on 2009-01-25 20:14:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
Edit post

Rate This Submission

1: >_<
2: I dunno...
3: meh!
4: Pretty cool
5: Wow!


  I thought that the poem waws a great! I liked the descriptive nature. I really enjoyed the parallelism between the sunset and the idea of seeing a love for the first time[atleast that is what I got from the poem]
| Posted on 2009-01-27 00:00:00 | by ImperfectGirl1 | [ Reply to This ]
  Excellent, beautiful poem, and a delightful salute to the sunset! I'm a country boy and naturally, I love poems about nature, and this is really good!
| Posted on 2009-01-25 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]

Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

1. Be honest.
2. Try not to give only compliments.
3. How did it make you feel?
4. Why did it make you feel that way?
5. Which parts?
6. What distracted from the piece?
7. What was unclear?
8. What does it remind you of?
9. How could it be improved?
10. What would you have done differently?
11. What was your interpretation of it?
12. Does it feel original?