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    dots Submission Name: Spare Car Keys dots

    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 165
    Class/Type: Poetry/Death
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    dotsSpare Car Keys dots

    Spare Car Keys

    Photographs and trinkets
    Tooth brush
    Hair brush
    Long living strands still attached

    All these things
    Have no life now
    Gathered up and black bagged

    Flimsy frilly underwear
    Bring hot stinging tears
    Drag the burning back
    Into my throat

    Your favorite tea cup
    Your old leather coat
    The print of Klimtís golden woman

    Films we watched so many times
    Your arm linked in mine
    Head nestled on my shoulder
    The third arm I should have grown to cuddle you closer

    Bras and socks skirts and tops
    Perfume and makeup
    Photographically still hold you

    Glasses we drank from
    Wine bottles we saved
    For candles and romantic nights
    All rolled up now in a Persian rug

    Spare car keys
    Written off with irony
    Of all the useless things thrown away that day

    Spare car keys
    Your life body bagged
    My life black bagged

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