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    dots Submission Name: Burgeramadots
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    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 265
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsBurgeramadots
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    Burgerama

    Wrap it
    Plastic box
    In fast polythene food it
    As easy as frozen
    And having children
    Mash it
    Mince it
    Churn out time saving
    Quick cut cardboard
    Dinner
    Is ready

    Smell it
    The regularity
    Of air freshed
    Puff
    Repeats in timely separation
    Of stinkless Molotov’s
    Antiseptic illusions
    Of falsehood

    Scrubs the advertisement
    Quick and needy
    Sold out to the Burgerama’s
    Speedy
    Easy

    A generation fed on
    Shhhh – it
    Slick propaganda-ised
    Of saving it
    The “ Soylent Green ”
    Of multi-packaged
    Diversity
    Spoon feeds
    Everyone

    Mesmerised populace
    Of diced and regurgitated
    Pampered plethoras
    Of choice
    Industrialised mouths
    In rootless towers
    Scavenging the next commercial break
    For the latest
    Meaning of life


    ( On the other side of the glass partition
    Stinky smelly dirty handed natural nature
    Sends out its signatures of soil fresh oxygen’s
    And
    The Sun's distance from the Earth
    Is about 400 times the Moon's distance
    And the Sun's diameter is about 400 times the Moon's diameter
    Because these ratios are approximately the same
    The sizes of the Sun and the Moon as seen from Earth
    Appear to be approximately the same
    This is why we experience the solar eclipse
    And they say this is merely coincidence )



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      I LOVE YOR USAGE OF SYMBOLISM. YOU HAVE SOME VERY STRONG VIEWS WHICH I CAN APPRECIATE. YOUR WRITING RESEMBLES SOME OF MY WORKS AS WELL. I LOOK FORWARD TO READIMNG MORE OF YOUR WORDS. HOPEFULLY YOU CAN GET A CHANCE TO CHECK OUT SOME OF MINE AND WE CAN EXCHANGE COMMENTS. KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK....
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