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    dots Submission Name: The Castle Walls.dots
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    Author: corruptedspirit
    ASL Info:    26/Male/England (Swindon
    Elite Ratio:    5.38 - 160/185/56
    Words: 294
    Class/Type: Misc/
    Total Views: 102
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1678



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       I just felt I had to write, and this is the result.
    I don't really know where it came from as this kind of writing isn't what I do.


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    dotsThe Castle Walls.dots
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    The hold of my heart stormed by your invading army,
    With messages of suduction and plans of domination you won my alliegence,
    I stepped down, and offered a throne by my side,
    You offered a security like my fort had never known,
    Within these walls, I was mighty, strong and unbreakable,
    I commanded the garrison with a confidence that was once away in foreign lands I could never explore alone,
    You held all the vessals, and you had the navigation,
    The wonderus lands you chose to share had me capivated and in awe,
    I bowed to you and offered my kingdom as your playground,
    All was settled amonst my lands, and the joy ran faster than I could comprehend,
    All was set for many moons to come, just the greatest test to pass,
    But time proved to be a worthy fow, bringing weapons that before the world had never known.
    The fortress walls slowly began to crack and crumble,
    The stocks of happiness and wonderment we had worked so hard to save slowly became depleted,
    I thought the fight was easy, but it proved so much more than hard,
    There seemed to be an insider feeding the onslaught but alas, could not be found.
    So the land of glory, hope and dreams I once knew now stands desolate, barron and broken.
    This I coped with with you still on my throne, but as I turn to gaze upon your face, only then I see, the whole time the insider I thought we faced bravely together...... Was you.

    If I ever rule another land, I'll be sure to keep it to myself, as this is a betrayal that will be forgotton only once the reaver sees fit to reap my soul.




    Submitted on 2009-01-27 20:23:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I declared war on the mirror
    and forgot its sly image

    I trusted a busker
    to draw me a plan

    of defense against
    enemies, real and imagined

    but the walls couldn't rsist
    the key in your hand
    | Posted on 2009-01-28 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]
      *Foe *reaper.
    Sorry, I couldn't help it.
    Other than the spelling issues, I loved this. interesting metaphor, and lovely lines:
    "... as I turn to gaze upon your face, only then I see, the whole time the insider I thought we faced bravely together...... Was you."
    Fantastic line. This rang true with me, as I've had an experience similar to the one described here....

    Slainte,

    DW
    | Posted on 2009-01-27 00:00:00 | by Shadowstar13 | [ Reply to This ]



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