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    dots Submission Name: Poem for a Winter's Daydots
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    Author: Poet of Avalon
    ASL Info:    22, male, NoVa
    Elite Ratio:    4.02 - 22/22/7
    Words: 93
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 1133
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    Description:
       It's cold and icy today, and I miss my special someone...


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    dotsPoem for a Winter's Daydots
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    When earth is masked with silken snow,
    And this life’s noise is hushed and low,
    Our only light a candle’s glow,
    And I whisper to you slow,
    “I love you.”

    Out in fields both cold and bleak
    Or under trees bare-naked, weak,
    To meet your eyes I ardently seek,
    To hold you close and softly speak,
    “I love you.”

    So on this icy winter’s day
    When light of sun is hid away,
    To find your warmth I hope and pray,
    And see your face, and to you say,
    “I love you.”




    Submitted on 2009-01-28 04:45:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Beautifully written. I thoroughly enjoyed it. I can feel the emotion, the desire, the icy hand of yearning that won't let go of your heart. The imagery that pulls you in and not only shows, but makes you feel every moment. It is a wonderful poem, one that I'm gonna fav.

    The Bird
    | Posted on 2009-01-29 00:00:00 | by Swimming Bird | [ Reply to This ]


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