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Hopeless Dusk.

Author: MysterydarkPoet
ASL Info:    20/f/Aust
Elite Ratio:    3.13 - 157 /295 /173
Words: 118
Class/Type: Poetry /Serious
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Hopeless Dusk.

A long dusty road,
dry lonely road.
no one calls my name.
no one.
i've been here for years.
missing the ocean and the rain.
missing something to piece me together,
like an unfinished puzzle
i've been left aside.
forgotten. and now old.

dreaming of.
seemingly distant from.
the refreshing dawn.
with a fresh tasting horizon.
it was swift and sweeping.
but became long and distant.
now a hopeless dusk.

If my story never starts,
How can i expect to finish?
there seems to be a dead end
at this end of the road.
no room for a turn around.
the suns going down
on this old forgotten town.
it's time to go home.

Submitted on 2009-01-28 12:46:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  There's something about the imagery that's so captivating. I feel myself in the story like it's about me or something. I like it. I like reading things and feeling as if I'm there. It's a god piece, I enjoyed it immensely.
| Posted on 2009-01-30 00:00:00 | by Realitywarp87 | [ Reply to This ]

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