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    dots Submission Name: Slide of handdots
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    Author: luvy
    ASL Info:    19/F/AZ
    Elite Ratio:    4.45 - 270/168/35
    Words: 95
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 396
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 640



    Description:
       Bare with me if it's not written to well. It's been a while since Ive written but im going through a rough spot and i needed to vent.


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    dotsSlide of handdots
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    Walking through a crowd of people
    Feeling comforted by the hustle and bustle
    receiving warmth and light from those closest to me
    I stand
    I scan
    I observe
    Attempting to move forward i stumble
    Loving hand search out and help stabilize
    Every slip avoided because of the helping hands
    I'm pushed
    I reach
    They retract
    I'm pushed beyond my pace
    As i fall i reach for the dependable hands
    Looking up i see sympathetic faces but no hands
    Tears
    Disappointment
    Heartbreak
    As i hit the ground





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