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    dots Submission Name: Framed by Greeddots
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    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 229
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsFramed by Greeddots
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    Framed by Greed

    A festooned and fractured peacock
    More than just his tailored suit
    But no less than the material made of

    Caricature of broken records
    He repeats the same different song
    In bland and blithered platitudes

    Fat millions counted in pennies
    With the black book phone numbers of X and rated lovers
    One he counts to ten

    Beguiled dishonesty of truth he wears
    On back stabbing smiles
    And comfortably ingratiated friends

    The fat starvation of his heart
    No longer needs to work so hard
    At being human

    Weapons dealer and pimp of innocence
    Player of black trade and drug abuse
    Criminal of luxuries bullet-proof

    All for me said his bloated sack belly
    The polish, the shine, the lights and indifference
    Servitude serves his robbery of plenty

    A hijacked ridicule of femininity
    Fashion dripped and preened beside him
    Prattled and gibbered on a diamond encrusted mobile phone

    Fake and vacuous cost so much
    In plastic implants and Dubai makeup
    Shoveled up

    He sauntered in
    The swagger of malpractice
    His gold plated education treading the deep plush pile
    On get out of jail free cards
    The sharks tooth gangster man and his bodyguard
    Were nothing more than an oily painting
    Framed by greed















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