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    dots Submission Name: Crashingsdots
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    Author: dthforeverpain8
    ASL Info:    15/Female/tmon
    Elite Ratio:    3.36 - 92/158/234
    Words: 70
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 76
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    dotsCrashingsdots
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    In this world
    The walls are always
    Crashing down around me
    And sometimes even on top of me
    But somehow I’m still alive
    No matter how bruised and wounded
    And with pieces this big falling
    Shouldn’t one have killed me already?
    And sometimes they are one
    A dagger through the heart
    And as my city
    Lies in ruin
    I am left underneath
    To bear its weight on my shoulders




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