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    dots Submission Name: You're a softer machinedots
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    Author: EEKS
    Elite Ratio:    2.82 - 647/1087/624
    Words: 118
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsYou're a softer machinedots
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    Let me tell you a story: not about you and me
    Not anything depressing or likely
    Nothing that would tell us what this means

    The world is made of an eggshell
    Its delicate and resting on dragon wings
    Soft and machine
    And every heartbeat is what keeps it floating
    But it's undeniably tilting

    I don't know what to think
    about you and me
    but our eggshell world is caving
    What happens to us
    when our world sinks to dust?
    What does this mean?

    I don't know what to say to you
    A softer machine
    I don't know what to say to me
    My heartbeat betrays me

    Don't sink please
    Don't sink





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