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fleets of time

Author: Jimi James
ASL Info:    24/m/somehwere
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Words: 102
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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"We few, we happy few, we band of brothers; For he to-day that sheds his blood with me Shall be my brother"
why tide? why time? time has no brothers
please bash my poem. criticize in the most offensive way.

fleets of time

spring commencing
more than just for one hand
i held two
but not for much longer

thought of the snow
that changes hue
and sleeps
and swallows
all that reminds of earth
all that reminds of birth
are there weeds
are there blessings
the final day
keeps no final say

spring commencing
lost then just one brother
i see a band of steps
oh give back that nice feeling
someone was steeling

thought of medals
mused of crowns
the history of believe
and the history of bye
submit the clock
for the oh hated rye
pass again time

Submitted on 2009-02-02 22:40:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  A drink to the auld lang syne... however it is spelled. A very moving piece you have here... It reminds me of our dirty little war and our dead little soldiers, and the outlook of someone who's in line to be another one. It's profound in the use of the seasons and spring, the "commencing" (military flair in that)... You write beautifully.
| Posted on 2009-02-03 00:00:00 | by SmokinG | [ Reply to This ]

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