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    dots Submission Name: Still Seconds ( A Valentine )dots

    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 191
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotsStill Seconds ( A Valentine )dots

    Still Seconds ( A Valentine )

    Chocolate box romance
    Of ribbons and flowers
    Wishes in poetical phrases
    Letter and verse
    Imprinted rhythmical beats of hearts
    In soft sweet confessions
    Underline Cupids children

    But my love prowls
    On feline soft paws
    Its breath an engine
    Its rhythm slow steaming

    Saint Valentines greatest lovers
    In painted masks
    Have struggled expressions
    Too beautiful to defy descriptions
    Of eternal Kings and Queens
    In heavens love
    Of Cherubim and Seraphim

    But my love rages
    In perfumed heat
    Its still seconds it eats
    Its constant deciphering of

    A full deluge could wax Shakespearian
    With torrential emotion
    Propound and profess
    Passions unceasing delirium
    And so esteemed the grammatical invocations
    Of loves powered obsessions
    Would write unceasingly on

    But my love irreversible
    Stands helpless acceptance
    Its distracted ecstatic if
    Its intoxicated blood

    And so I break upon a howling wind
    Aching pours from my throat
    A screaming name
    Desperate tempest to a brooding sea
    I stand helpless
    In still seconds
    Unable to contend
    With love

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