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    dots Submission Name: Barbecue by the Lakedots

    Author: mae
    Elite Ratio:    5.96 - 597/644/262
    Words: 240
    Class/Type: Poetry/Comedy
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    dotsBarbecue by the Lakedots

    There's a party goin' on
    this moonless night
    down by the lake
    way outta sight.

    The lawn gnomes from the city
    have gathered for a feast
    and invited pink flamingos
    and other ornamental beasts.

    The evening started out just fine,
    but soon personalities clashed.
    Decoys, flamingos and steel herons
    all started talking trash.

    To the frogs and the turtles
    down in the grassy reeds
    it didn't matter which bird was talkin'
    when it came to amphibious feed.

    The dragonflies and butterflies
    felt the same about the frogs
    flitting skittishly overhead
    never resting on the logs.

    Skunks and squirrels and rabbits
    were nibbling leafy hors d'oeuvre
    until they saw the owl fly by
    and they were slightly unnerved.

    Grapevine deer were getting acquainted
    with their uptown cousins of wire
    when chainsaw carved bears showed up
    and the situation turned dire.

    Just when it seemed that predators and prey
    were growing more and more uneasy,
    who should appear bringing peace and calm.
    None other than Saint Francis Assisi!

    The evening was saved by his soothing voice
    and the lamb and the lion lay down.
    No guest ate another despite inclinations,
    and good will was felt all around.

    Submitted on 2009-02-04 08:31:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Your sense of humor for turning things around is quite enjoyable to read. I sense that what you are saying is that all of nature has a sense of survival. Give me more ! Such is neeed in an up tight world.
    | Posted on 2009-04-16 00:00:00 | by realpoet | [ Reply to This ]
      Highly original and very well written.

    | Posted on 2009-03-13 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]

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