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    dots Submission Name: New Type of Ordersdots
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    Author: freak_like_me
    ASL Info:    20/female/Ireland
    Elite Ratio:    4.81 - 120/118/49
    Words: 129
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 768
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    Description:
       we were messing about talking about bringing out a new cereal called credit crunch by kellogs and stuff, this is kind of like a piece of work that i knw inside if i worked on properly could turn out to be a good metaphorical analysis on the credit crunch, however what ive wrote here isnt very liable as it is, it needs work. critique as u will


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    Did you hear about that...that new type of cereal that's out now?
    Crunch...crunch something?
    Or something like that

    Oh yes I remember now
    When I walk into the small town cafe
    At breakfast time
    I often order some Credit Crunch
    with my favourite alpro soya milk

    It takes the edge off the crunch

    And when we move on to lunchtime
    I call at the sandwich bar
    Choose my wholemeal bread
    "What would you like in your sandwich dear?"
    "Eh, do u have any...any of that Tuna Crunch?"
    "No dear sorry, but we do have some Credit Crunch, lovely job in wholemeal that one...?"

    I walk around town
    eating my credit crunch filled sandwich
    As I observe the closing world around me

    What happened?




    Submitted on 2009-02-05 13:40:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      nice piece here. gave me a chuckle. i think this would work better as prose, and maybe you could expand on this idea.
    | Posted on 2009-02-11 00:00:00 | by joeyalphabet | [ Reply to This ]
      http://www.eliteskills.com/z/170818

    You too huh?
    | Posted on 2009-02-05 00:00:00 | by Raphael | [ Reply to This ]


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