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    dots Submission Name: Tick Tockdots
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    Author: Lavender
    ASL Info:    20/F/USA
    Elite Ratio:    3.09 - 101/125/59
    Words: 101
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/BrokenHeart
    Total Views: 664
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 641



    Description:
       Just something random. Not supposed to have any sort of rhythm or anything ;;


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    dotsTick Tockdots
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    Tick tock
    Time is passing by
    The days seem like they'll never end
    Surrounded by these lies
    Searching for one, but love someone else
    I can't believe the pain
    It hurts to think that I might not
    Ever see you again
    You've been in my dreams
    Your face as clear as day
    And then when I awoke
    The joy melted away
    I was alone again
    Tick tock
    Time is passing by
    Flying like the wind
    Too fast for the human eye
    Its sighs relieve my pain
    But still it hurts to think of you
    If you knew... what would you do?




    Submitted on 2009-02-06 10:57:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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