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Fed Up


Author: bubble_popper15
ASL Info:    17, f, confused
Elite Ratio:    4.13 - 201 /127 /45
Words: 114
Class/Type: Poetry /Depressed
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It might not be the best thing in the whole wide world, but I am showing my feelings about my boyfriend.


Fed Up


Don't understand why
I have to cry
Every day and night
I am not alright

You make me so mad
Am I really that bad?
Probably the best you've had
I know that for a fact.

You're wasting me away
I don't know what to say
Right now I'm going to stay
But I will go astray

I am better than this.
When I leave, you will miss
Miss my hugs and that sweet kiss
I forever planted on your lips

You won't know what you had till I'm gone.
You'll be left all alone
Won't call you anymore on the phone
I am making my feelings known.




Submitted on 2009-02-06 18:49:26     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  i like this alot; at the beginning it seems to me that you are on shaky ground and not sure, but at the end its like your drawing the line
| Posted on 2009-05-27 00:00:00 | by KimmyBoo | [ Reply to This ]


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