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    dots Submission Name: Femininedots
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    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 218
    Class/Type: Poetry/Legend
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    dotsFemininedots
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    Feminine

    Ancient practice knew
    The importance of primal
    Creation
    The identity of birth
    It was then
    The nurtured seed of flourishing life
    Rested in the core
    Of season revolving
    Planetary evolving
    Chord spirit
    Life

    The dance of willing sacrifice
    To die exulted
    In giving
    Re-birthing in mystical cycles
    It was then
    The natural worship
    Of offering
    Ultimate resplendent loving

    Ancient this nature was
    A primordial balance
    Of intuitive understanding
    A deeper knowledge let flow
    And knew the identity
    Of birth

    Feminine




    But witchery and rack
    And bible black
    Have distorted by men
    The word of life to death
    And love to sin
    A picture perfect administration of heaven
    The masculine doctrines written
    Counted Eve responsible
    For the fall from Eden

    Turned woman to guilt
    And prized possession
    The plaything of capitalism
    Over ruled by man made dogma ( godma )
    The stronger reviled
    To the weaker

    Dirtied by sex
    The apple core stuck in her throat
    The equilibrium tipped
    To favour control
    By the power hunger
    Of religion




    Once long ago
    We knew the identity
    Of birth
    The power of life
    The importance of
    Primal creation
    The nurtured seed
    Of flourishing life

    Feminine










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