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    dots Submission Name: Script Cognitivedots
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    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 142
    Class/Type: Poetry/Legend
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    dotsScript Cognitivedots
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    Script Cognitive

    Guiding Hierophants
    And Priestess’s
    The voices of subliminal
    Spiritual clue-lings
    Reach out to us
    Where the quiz-lings longings
    Seeks their answers

    Footprints through the millennia
    They have left their traces
    Verse of heroes
    Heroines of the stanza
    Utter from silent wounds
    And heart wrenching beauty

    Souls to contain the expressive
    Un-worded
    The fancy and truth
    Deliberated on the pages
    Of their hearts

    Left open to the targets
    Of emotion
    Stand courageous only human
    To the ridicule and the laudable
    For the poetry of the world

    Write on
    Geniuses of the word
    Send the enterprise of messages
    Speak for all
    All who find inexpressive
    Their language faltered
    Needs vocal
    To satisfy the yearning dumbness
    Of floating poignant
    Captured

    And remind us
    Where the quiz-lings longings
    Seek their answers







    Submitted on 2009-02-07 17:41:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I can see what you are trying to do with this and it has a nice feel to it and some lovely wording however..

    both of your pieces lost me...or at least the first few verses did ....as there was a little too much of this...towards the end it begins to make sense and a point is made...just my thoughts..stormy
    | Posted on 2009-02-07 00:00:00 | by stormyskies | [ Reply to This ]


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