I really like this. Ive an inbuilt jaundice is a bit akward but not incorrectly written Ive an is just strange sounding. I've could be ommited for a smoother flow but its not necessary.
"all parts are whole
existence displaces what I truly know" I love this part it speaks to me; dry leaves rattling on trees as the wind heaves with all it's might.
"skin shedding philanthropy
threatens to dis-embowel me"
I enjoyed the subtly of this not so much a forceful gutting but more of lacking anything to contain oneself. Shattered and mangled ideas force feeding ultimately impeding digestion.
we are limited only by our minds.
peace
thank you
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