Sunset Swing Set

Author: PiperH ASL Info:    17, F, Georgia Elite Ratio:    3.89 - 253 /299 /172 Words: 59

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Sunset Swing Set

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The earth, is still My body swings My mind wonders About many things The wind, is cold My body flies My mind ponders The little lies The sun, is setting My body tires My mind sinks In the orange fire The earth, is still My body stops My mind wonders As the sun does drop

Submitted on 2009-02-07 21:29:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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It is a little cutesy for my taste, but you strip that way and I really do think you have a damn good foundation to build something truly great on this piece.

| Posted on 2009-02-07 00:00:00 | by nicodemous | [ Reply to This ]

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