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    dots Submission Name: Sunset Swing Setdots
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    Author: PiperH
    ASL Info:    17, F, Georgia
    Elite Ratio:    3.89 - 253/299/172
    Words: 59
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 1249
    Average Vote:    3.5000
    Bytes: 407



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    dotsSunset Swing Setdots
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    The earth, is still
    My body swings
    My mind wonders
    About many things

    The wind, is cold
    My body flies
    My mind ponders
    The little lies

    The sun, is setting
    My body tires
    My mind sinks
    In the orange fire

    The earth, is still
    My body stops
    My mind wonders
    As the sun does drop




    Submitted on 2009-02-07 21:29:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      It is a little cutesy for my taste, but you strip that way and I really do think you have a damn good foundation to build something truly great on this piece.
    | Posted on 2009-02-07 00:00:00 | by nicodemous | [ Reply to This ]


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