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    dots Submission Name: Sun on the Horizondots
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    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 105
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 741
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    Description:
       A sea gull flies through this piece.


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    dotsSun on the Horizondots
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    These mountains aren't in my hands
    behind the shadows or the creases of my skin

    hours are tracers
    cars driving down the interstate at infinite speeds

    the colors remind me of frozen popsicles,
    burning cities,
    candle light

    at some point there were giants
    dipping their toes in the oceans

    derivative's haunt me
    and count the pages of numbers
    and scrapers upon stacks of numbers
    crunching monks, and majors and cheifs

    this idea of a circle, surrounded on both sides by an equal reflection

    like the swollen mother moon
    with waves gently painting her kissing
    her Self




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      I enjoyed this very much, like a fresh cascading of imagery and movement of things both tangible and the more hard to grasp emotional textures. ☺
    | Posted on 2015-12-10 00:00:00 | by CrypticBard | [ Reply to This ]


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