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    dots Submission Name: yearbookdots
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    Author: brokenmuse
    ASL Info:    26/F/AL
    Elite Ratio:    3.29 - 756/734/161
    Words: 111
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nostalgia
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    dotsyearbookdots
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    a black and white photo
    still-frame golden years
    and awkward first touches

    where do the years go
    when you find yourself
    so many years and miles
    from friends and smiles

    all the dreams you used to have
    the first kisses and budding hopes
    all that naivete come and gone

    like the miles along the road
    touches and whispers spent
    and not returned

    does it all really live on?
    or just become
    a bittersweet memory
    an origame moment
    and a quiet, pained laugh
    when you sit alone
    looking back at what might
    have been

    so many smiles
    so many miles
    and still you stay a friend.




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      "an origame moment"

    that is sweet...great line

    nothing like black and whites....

    my parents are 89 and 92...still chugging along..but have started asking me what i want of theirs...really nothing...but i have asked for two things...one is a set of old classical music on vinyl..the other is a photo album of most of their relatives..their parents, grandparents, aunts and uncles...the settings, the texture of the photos...almost like adam and eve being photographed, they look so old...

    the cars...from the 1920's and 30's...what a feel..

    this poem has that feel---

    that touch...i like it much.

    jacob
    | Posted on 2011-03-26 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      This is excellent, and brings with it the nostalgia that we all feel when looking at old albums and pictures from the past. The past is not dead, but living on with us, just mute and quiet, and representing what has been instead of what might be.

    Nice work!
    | Posted on 2010-10-24 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      sometimes smiles can be fake, too, and wouldn't you rather be far away from those?
    this poem was easy to relate to, which is why i liked it very much. Thank you for putting into words some of those things we always feel and never know how to express.
    | Posted on 2009-02-09 00:00:00 | by WeirdNormality | [ Reply to This ]


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