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    Author: Iffy
    ASL Info:    22/F/Australia
    Elite Ratio:    6.28 - 92/57/43
    Words: 216
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       To him: pray that I'm mistaken...


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    Iím sick of it,
    Of hearing you repeat again and again that I was never worth it.
    Of being reminded day and night that Iím a failure,
    A mistake on your part.

    Iím tired of it,
    Of the lies you made me believe that day.
    How for just one moment, one precious moment,
    I foolishly believed you loved me.

    I was so naÔve,
    Looking back now, there were so many signs just hidden within each word you said.
    But I never delved deeper; I was far too scared,
    Scared of seeing the dark side of your hand.

    What did you achieve?
    From hiding me from the rest of the world.
    Pretending that I was yours alone, that I belonged to you,
    Even though you only ever pushed me further away.

    Couldnít you see you were hated?
    Werenít the tears in my eyes enough proof that I never truly loved you?
    That I tried so hard to hold on to the theory
    That someday you might change?

    Is this what you wanted?
    To say the clichťd words that you so easily poured from your artificial heart.
    Without seeing, really seeing, that I had finally understood,
    The truth that you recoiled from:

    You will never be the man you esteem to be.




    Submitted on 2009-02-09 06:39:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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       To your father I am guessing, though this could work as if to a lover, funny how that is possible.

    Anyway, I applaud your passion and commend you for laying bare your feelings for us all to see. I do wonder if you choose to write esteem to be at the end. I would have to assume you did and I find it to be an interesting and intriguing choice.
    | Posted on 2009-02-09 00:00:00 | by nicodemous | [ Reply to This ]


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