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    dots Submission Name: Just anything...dots

    Author: MyWorld
    ASL Info:    21/M/IN
    Elite Ratio:    3.3 - 76/99/87
    Words: 117
    Class/Type: Poetry/Angst
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    dotsJust anything...dots

    Just one more joke that I'll never laugh at
    Just one more hurdle, it'll take me forever to pass that
    Just one more wish that'll never come true
    One more lonely night, wondering whatever will I do
    Just one more line in a song that doesn't make sense
    Before the chase stops, gotta break away from the cops
    Just one more fence
    Just another piece of straw to conceal the needle
    Just another chance gone, as if I didn't even need it
    Just another lie that I didn't even have to tell
    Just another night wishing that I was back in hell
    Just another lifetime singing a sad, sad song..
    Just another road, a mile too long

    Submitted on 2009-02-09 08:22:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Looks as if she has compartmentalised her experience and reality... emotionally and relationally she is tied to you but biologically and sensually she has remained a 'free spirit.'
    | Posted on 2009-02-09 00:00:00 | by CrypticBard | [ Reply to This ]

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