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    dots Submission Name: Awake...dots
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    Author: MrBear
    ASL Info:    19/M/Ga
    Elite Ratio:    3.01 - 59/109/48
    Words: 109
    Class/Type: Poetry/Religious
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    dotsAwake...dots
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    Am I destined to pay - for the days of old?
    Powerful plagues - and tormented souls,
    Streets of pain - for memory lane --
    Burrow my sorrows... Forget the remains......



    "Swallow memories... Stop reminiscing!
    God is preparing future! Take a look in the kitchen!" ---
    Well... cook up something sweet... I've devoured the sour.......
    Something for my strength....... So I can reclaim my power.



    But I still sit in awe... - in my courtyard of plight...
    Voices so loud, they blind my sight......
    Booming interruption -- makes everything right....
    "Awake thou that sleepest, and I will give you light!" (Ephesians 5:1)




    Submitted on 2009-02-09 09:37:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      What good is light to one that slumbers.
    Good point.
    | Posted on 2009-02-09 00:00:00 | by CrypticBard | [ Reply to This ]


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