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    dots Submission Name: Shes a Savage Killerdots
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    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 217
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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    dotsShes a Savage Killerdots
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    Shes a Savage Killer



    She slides between unformed
    Dark stealthy
    Yellow blaze eyes
    Implacable as they read
    Deaths demise
    By strangled throats
    In needle merciless teeth

    Blood is drawn
    Cold in her domain
    Demanding respect
    She is the savage killer
    Perfect

    Only a slow guttural prowl
    For the scent of fear
    Slips silently
    On razor claws
    As she slinks and sniffs
    Again
    The succulent scent

    Night and shadows
    Her allies
    Deadly camouflage intent
    And again
    The hunger
    And the succulent scent
    Of blood

    Hunter of the wary and the weak
    As black as the pride
    Of any coals pit
    A crouching
    Playful
    Face of death
    She purrs
    Content

    Soft as unseen
    Sprints and batters
    The boarder flowers
    While licking her lips
    For the taste of blood
    The feline killing machine
    Pounces

    ( And as I open my garden gate Sophie my dark and black
    and midnight cat. Leaves her prey to sidle slinky up to me
    wrapping and purring round my ankles. I reach down, lift her up,
    cuddle and tickle behind her ears as they twitch, listening,
    to the half dead mouse intent on escaping )












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      For some reason this poem made me smile. It was good.
    Angel
    | Posted on 2009-02-10 00:00:00 | by bubble_popper15 | [ Reply to This ]


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