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    dots Submission Name: Ice & Firedots
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    Author: Iffy
    Elite Ratio:    6.33 - 91/55/41
    Words: 147
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dotsIce & Firedots
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    Perfection can never be as perfect as we believe.
    What’s perfect to one is flawed to another.
    But I believe perfection can be achieved.
    It's there when we drown in the flames of one another.

    Beauty is considered such a feminine trait.
    I know you’ve always seen that in all that is mine.
    If only you could feel the beauty of our fate.
    Sculpted by an angel with a touch so divine.

    The preachers of power who live what they preach.
    Respect the efforts that give birth to desire.
    But I know of no teacher who can reasonably teach
    The effortlessness of joining ice with fire

    The souls that surround us are forever in motion.
    Learning the music but preferring to mime.
    Our hymn has survived to be sung through commotion:
    “You are beauty, we are beauty, we are divine, unchanged by time”




    Submitted on 2009-02-10 11:09:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      If only we could feel the beauty of our fate...This line implies a totally different world, a perfect one. I believe that perfection can be achieved, but my inner energy is being sucked out by the human life; I'm not left with much, and striving for perfection is a slow but certain killer.
    Only our own minds could teach us, only us, the effortlessness of joining the ice of the every-day life and the fire of our divine nature. If touching perfection could be taught, if our eyes wouldn't refuse us the right to see the unseen, the Earth would become one with the universe and souls would travel freely across.
    The last stanza contains the essence of the poem. "Learning the music but prefering to mime" is my favorite line. It gives away your entire understanding of life...or maybe I project my own vision of life on it...
    It is a well thought and inspiring poem, treating of many complex subjects.

    Thanks for sharing it with us,
    Laura
    | Posted on 2009-10-10 00:00:00 | by ChaoticLaurel | [ Reply to This ]



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