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    dots Submission Name: The Falldots
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    Author: SquallFlame
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    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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    dotsThe Falldots
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    The Fall


    As the darkness swells over me like water around a rock
    I feel the ever-consuming darkness wrap me in black fire
    Burning and ripping at my heart of hearts, my soul

    Driving me into a slow rage and turning my heart cold
    Harder than the most wonderful alluring metals

    The darkness blinds me from the truth and the light
    As I sink farther and farther into the unbearable void
    My consciousness of this world fades and I fall into nothing
    My memories fade and my life falls into the despair
    No sense of time or a sense of myself as I fall deeper

    Deeper into the darkness I feel more pain
    As my heart of hearts becomes harder and colder
    I curl in a ball and wait for the end, my death
    Life is a pain more painful than any hell
    I pray for the souls lost in the darkness




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