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Author: Dimension_X
ASL Info:    17/F/NJ
Elite Ratio:    5.39 - 124 /108 /70
Words: 113
Class/Type: Misc /Misc
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Completely different style than my own.

Thoughts? Please and thank you!


I am so used to this body
that I no longer appreciate its contours.
I’d rather be flatter there,
bigger here, and have a few more inches
separating me from the ground I walk on.
But like a rainbow after the storm passes
or the stomach-ache 10 Hershey bars in
you fight your way through.
And somehow with your arms wrapped around
this perfectly flawed body
I know I’m beautiful.
(though I’ll still go to the gym tomorrow)
Just gotta hear it whispered
every once in a while.
Cause the only place I believe
in love
is the paper I write our story on.

Submitted on 2009-02-10 17:28:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  It's a nice little note of the hypocrisy we walk through daily.

Like, taking your body for granted - but going to the gym.

Like, wanting to be told you're beautiful - but only believing love, really, when it's written down.

This comment is mostly worthless but know that I read it and enjoyed it, for whatever that's worth to you.

So I guess my unbiased review is that I liked it.
| Posted on 2009-02-10 00:00:00 | by Fizzlethorpe | [ Reply to This ]

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